Feather's Help Stop.

[Feather]

Bleh, okies okies I know that you know that I have a low tolerance.... Well I just want you to know that is NOT true. I'm actually quite patient =3 -nodes-. Anyway, I have been roleplaying for about four years, I've gotten 85% on my report cards in writing (an A) and I just love to write. To the point, you post a piece of writing here, and I help you make it better. I can lecture you all I want here, for there is a lot of very important information that me and Honovi has discussed in the past about making a super awesome character in some super awesome writing. But I'm deciding not to put it here >:-). I might though, later on. This is a COURSE, you'll be reporting here every so often to hear lectures children.

Ok, post here with this form. And remember to take out the brackets:

Name: (your name)
Age: (Your age)
Character name: (The character your writing with's name)
Experience: (Give me a good hard date that you've been roleplaying for)
Why Your Here: (Here, just tell me what you want to improve in. Write either "Spelling and Grammar", "Describing", "Making Interesting", or something else that you need help on)
Touch-Type: (Can you type without looking at the keyboard?)
Sample: (just post a sample of writing so I can see where your at)


I want as many people as possible coming here! Don be shy, everyone can use a lil touching up on their writing to make them better =3

[wizzardowl]

i'm called wizzardowl

my charter's name is wizzard

i have never rollplayed before
i need to describe better and make things interesting
i can not touch type at all
one day there was a bird named bat that wanted to be a king but he did not know how
so he whent to school and learned how to rule his kingdom very well

[Feather]

wizzardowl said:

i'm called wizzardowl

my charter's name is wizzard

i have never rollplayed before
i need to describe better and make things interesting
i can not touch type at all
one day there was a bird named bat that wanted to be a king but he did not know how
so he whent to school and learned how to rule his kingdom very well

K, I added the age onto the form xP

Anyway, you don't have to roleplay good to be a good writer.

Spelling mistakes are important to fix-
*Rollplay- Roleplay
*whent- went

Try to use punctuation, periods, comas, and capitals. Put periods at the end of a sentence, and capitals at the beginning of sentences and names and of the 'i's.

The story-
Why was there a bird named bat? o.0
Why did he want to be king? And be king of what?
What school is it?
How did he find or learn about the school?
How did he learn how to rule a kingdom?
What kingdom did he rule?

Who exactly was he?
What did he look like?
What kind of bird is he?

Just remember that you must give the reader a clear idea of everything. Repost your story using what I told you. There are probably much more to add to fix it, but I shall be lecturing latta.

[Skein]

Name: lets call me Skien.
Age: 14-17
Character name: havnt quite made it yet. I am thinking Hygog.
Experience: I am quite young at roleplaying, but I have "RPed" on a game called StarCraft. I have been on the sites for about three years. I am on about 4-6 sites, some I think are dead.
Why Your Here: I need alot of help on typing skills, grammer, and ideas. I need to be creative with a story I am writing, and get it set-up correctly.
Touch-Type: saddly I use my index fingers, and look at the key board. I can type fast though, but I am working on the full finger type.
Sample: Hygog sat up suddenly from his nest. something hit his tree. His head twitched left to right, and he hopped over to the entrance the only way a squirrel can.
He passed his storage room were he kept his nuts and berries, and looked out, and twitched his head up, down, left, and right for fear of preditors.
Once he finnaly looked down, he saw a young humming bird had hit his tree, and was on the ground.
Suddenly, he started to go down, every once-in'a-while stopping to look around, and scurried down the trunk.
He finnaly got to the bird, and looked at it, and tried to communicate.
"Hello? are you awake?" he said, and when the humming bird didnt awnser, he picked up the bird, and ran up to the top of the tree to his hollow.
He put the bird in a spare nest he had, and finnaly let the birds side to go eat.

[Feather]

duke00 said:

Name: lets call me Skien.
Age: 14-17
Character name: havnt quite made it yet. I am thinking Hygog.
Experience: I am quite young at roleplaying, but I have "RPed" on a game called StarCraft. I have been on the sites for about three years. I am on about 4-6 sites, some I think are dead.
Why Your Here: I need alot of help on typing skills, grammer, and ideas. I need to be creative with a story I am writing, and get it set-up correctly.
Touch-Type: saddly I use my index fingers, and look at the key board. I can type fast though, but I am working on the full finger type.
Sample: Hygog sat up suddenly from his nest. something hit his tree. His head twitched left to right, and he hopped over to the entrance the only way a squirrel can.
He passed his storage room were he kept his nuts and berries, and looked out, and twitched his head up, down, left, and right for fear of preditors.
Once he finnaly looked down, he saw a young humming bird had hit his tree, and was on the ground.
Suddenly, he started to go down, every once-in'a-while stopping to look around, and scurried down the trunk.
He finnaly got to the bird, and looked at it, and tried to communicate.
"Hello? are you awake?" he said, and when the humming bird didnt awnser, he picked up the bird, and ran up to the top of the tree to his hollow.
He put the bird in a spare nest he had, and finnaly let the birds side to go eat.

Okies, Spelling. AWwwwwwwwwwwwww, I know I hate spelling.

*preditors- Predators
*finaly- Finally
*awnser- Answer

Grammar (the only thing I could spot xP)
*birds- Bird's or Birds'

The description and the such is kinda hard to explain =\. But I will be explaining in the lectures I'll be having =)

[Skein]

alrright. so... do we wait for a new lecture? or do we post more writing?

[Feather]

Just wait.... Actually, I'm going to post now and wait for more people before posting my next lecture.

[Feather]

Lesson One!

Okay! I’m just going to start thing out easy. Presentation!
When your writing, using proper spelling and punctuation will make a good impression on other fellow roleplayers! Otherwise they’d think you’re a total noob*. Now, you can be really good at writing, but grammar, spelling, and punctuation will make it easier for the readers to understand your writing better. You may thing, “its pointless!”, “I can’t do spelling/grammar/punctuation for my life!”, or “But I can understand chat/leetspeak!*” Do. Not. Think. This. If you do, you die and fail my class >=). First of all, some times you have to put a little effort into making your posts be nice. Okay, next though (don’t be ashamed, I remember when I was a noob and I thought this) “Whats the point in putting effort in your posts? Its stupid!” Think this, and you die harder. We are not only learning the basics of roleplaying, we are learning how to improve in our writing (show off your skillz to your class). Kay, lets give some examples.

Wrong:
“he was a good boy.every one liks him ezpeialy his famlly.”
“god booy he waz evry 1 liks him zpesialy his famly”
And defiantly NOT this:
“h3 w@$ a g00d b0y 3vry1 l!k3$ h!m 3zp3aly his f@m||y”

That above is WRONG. Would you like to role-play with someone that writes like that? You make think “Sure, its not that bad” I kill you. You want someone to prove your writing with, which will actually acknowledge it. You go to a roleplay writing like that, unless they’re all noobs, you’ll just humiliate yourself even though it won’t look like it. This is how people want to write:

The RIGHT way:

“Basking in a shimmering pact of clear sun filtering past a round gap from trees that were oddly further away, lay the silver wolf. The small green pedals clung on to their branches, and mourned with the wind, just as she mourned with them as she awoke.”

Or

". Afterwards she rested her gaze on her boney paws that had the cragged palpatry that had faintly gashed the leaf veiled ground. She flinched with the poke of a thin slender twig in her ear, moving her attention to find the company of a large bush by her."

You may think this is small, just a little longer than the wrong ways, but trust me it’s a lot better. Well, the grammar in this isn’t that great xP. This has interesting words, which I will teach you in a different lesson. While your writing, edit (I will teach this too xP), just whip through your writing and fix your spelling and grammar errors. There are spell checks in the proboard sites, and in this site I put a spell-check in the quick reply box. Yes, thank me. I will mention now, become best friends with the Dictionary and Thesaurus*, trust me it saves your life.

Ok, do not use the comas like I do please. I really suck at it and I doubt I’m doing it right anyway. Don’t worry, they teach you this comas racdrops in grade four if you go to school xD.

One other thing I notice, when you write and you’re using the “i”s make sure you capitalize it, it’s very important. Also, make sure to press the spacebar* once when you type a period just so the writing looks neat.

Ok, I think that’s it for now. Of course I still have more to tell you but that’s for later. I want you to write something after this post for me using what I taught you. Don’t worry, nothing fancy I’m not asking you to do homework (I think you have enough of that at school xD). If you’re thinking of quitting this class, I just want you to know I own supper secret information that could completely boost up your writing, original ness, and make you up to the semi-advanced literates. I may not have answered all your questions now, but trust me, with this lesson burned in your head you’re just beginning your quest to greatness.

I shall explain more next lesson =3

*Noob, an illiterate person that acts immature.
*Chat/leetspeak, a computer chat that uses horrible spelling and numbers in the writing.
*Thesaurus, a kind of dictionary you can search for synonyms.
*Spacebar, that large bar that puts a space between your words, located on your keyboard (amazing thing I know).

[Skein]

So far, I know almost of that. I didnt know the Chat/leetspeak thing.
I play alot of StarCraft, so I may talk funny sometimes. for some reason, people dont type correctly.
Also, I just want to put something out. I have a argument with someone about this.

sup IS NOT A WORD. ITS DUMB SLANG NO ONE USES. it means whats up, and some idiot thought to shorten it to sup.

Sorry for the random outburst, but it ticks me off. you can sometime make a leson about dumb comp slang.

[Feather]

Ya, I know you've been keeping your posts in order but you still need to watch out for the capitals. This is mainly for everyone else that has trouble doing that.

[Skein]

I hate capitals. They <--(had to capitalize) are very annoying. I wish is would just auto cap.

[wizzardowl]

Here I have been working on this.

on a star lite night wizzard flew from his hallow. He just loved nights like this. Then he landed on a low branch .

[Feather]

A little better wizzard. I'm just going to wait a while until we get more people on here before I post another lecture.

[wizzardowl]

ok thanks but faether should we play with our chacter or what???

[Feather]

I don't understand this question. But I think what you mean is, we are not roleplaying on this thread but we're improving with your writing while roleplaying. The character you were talking about in the form was just so I know who you're talking about in your roleplay sample. And I want you to edit your form, wizzard, so I know how old you are.

[Skein]

Ok, dont ask, but I am writing a story about squirrels. Yes, squirrels. I have found them quite interesting, and have researched them some.
I have learned alot, and am making a novel about it, for my first idea was allready taken (my idea was what would happen if the worlds power, electicity, gas, ect, stopped working.
I am currently trying to find out how to make the world work, and using the Warriors series and the Gardians of Ga'Hoole as stucture, without making them alike in almost any way.

so far, I am thinking about making two groups of squirrels, the Gray Tree Squirrels and the Thirteen-lined Ground Squirrel those groups. I still need to find out how the world works, should there be humans, how they act, should they have "magic", ect.

What I really am saying is I need some help with this. if you need any reserch on squirrels, I am you man. I need some help with the set-up with this, and I hope you can help.

Gray Squirrel: The Eastern Gray Squirrel (Sciurus carolinensis) is a tree squirrel native to the eastern and midwestern United States and to the southerly portions of the eastern provinces of Canada. The specific epithet, carolinensis, refers to the Carolinas, where the species was first recorded and where the animal is still extremely common. The native range of the eastern gray squirrel overlaps with that of the fox squirrel (Sciurus niger), with which it is sometimes confused, although the core of the fox squirrel's range is slightly more to the west.

Thirteen-lined Ground Squirrel: The thirteen-lined ground squirrel (Spermophilus tridecemlineatus), also known as the striped gopher, a squinney in parts of Iowa, and as the leopard-spermophile in Audubon’s day, is a brownish ground squirrel with 13 alternating brown and whitish longitudinal lines (sometimes partially broken into spots) on back and sides creating rows of whitish spots within dark lines.
The thirteen-lined ground squirrel is strictly diurnal and is especially active on warm days. A solitary or only somewhat colonial hibernator, it often occurs in aggregations in suitable habitats.
Primary diet includes grass and weed seeds, caterpillars, and grasshoppers, but may also eat bird flesh and even mice and shrews. This squirrel sometimes damages gardens by digging burrows and eating vegetables, but also devours weed seeds and harmful insects.

taken from Wiki. my personal research site.

[wizzardowl]

so,is this what you want

name:wizzardowl
age17
chaacter name:wizzard
exp:none
why i am here: grammer and descebing
touch type:no i can not
sample:wizzard sat on a branch of a leafy tree.he thought about the stars. he wanted to be part of the world .just like all the other birds.

[Feather]

Its fine, you could've just modified that other post but it doesn't matter.
Are you sure your 17? o.0.... I always thought of you..... younger......